Three Dollar Quill

I did some poetry editing. Let's see how that breaks down.

• Changed "the land"
• Punctuation pass (including fixing the quote marks)
• Made a call on the line breaks (including the tenth stanza)
• I am using "ere" correctly

Still need to figure out:

• Replacing "health" with "healing"
• The beginning of the speech
• "then"/"kin", and for that matter, "home"/"down", and "clashed"/"lash". Maybe some way to get it to "clash"... "then"/"in", "in"/"mend"
• Too much "forsake"
• Replacing "lapse" with "collapse"
• End of eighth stanza
• Ninth stanza
• "From" in thirteenth stanza
• Still not sure what the deal is with "storm'd"
• Replacing "almost" with "practically"
• Last line of twenty-sixth stanza
• "Sore" in twenty-seventh stanza
• Too much "struck"/not enough parallelism
• General awkwardness in the twenty-ninth through thirty-third stanzas

I'm not sure what to focus on next.

I guess I'll just take things from either the beginning or the end.

For now, I want to take things easy-ish, because I had a rough night.

Good night.