All right, there we go. I removed the comments from the draft, and formatted the draft based on my initial metrical analysis. I then added some custom CSS to fix how it rendered in the theme.
The next step from this is to do a few passes of revision on screen, then print it out (it's like 4 pages), and take notes on issues.
The main focus show be on improving the quality of the draft, but I also want to think some about presentation and work on writing up my notes for the rest of the setting document.
All right, I'd better get ready for bed.